Comments : The accident

  • 19 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    wow...so sad, but so nicely written. You did really well capturing the sadness of this occasion.

    Just a few grammar errors...

    you have quite a few lower case i's that should be capitalized.

    there was at least one "u"...since you mostly wrote "you" they should all be "you" (that's probably why you had to post it as internet slang the first time)

    These lines:
    i just want to an explanation
    why you and i?

    should have the "to" removed and then the 2nd line should start with "to" or "for" or probably something like "Please tell me..."