I loved this poem. I know how that feels somewhat. I loved the word choice and the flow in this poem. 5/5

You think I have something to say
but I'm waiting to hear you say
That you don't want me to go
I'm the smile in your day

it was the stanza i liked it nicely panned take care 5/5

Your words, they linger from your lips
as they wrap around my heart
You pull me in closer
before I fall apart
`Okay, I abso-freaking-lutely LOVE the first two lines of that stanza ! Just beautiful . But the last two were so short it just screwd up the flow T_T

You think I have something to say
but I'm waiting to hear you say
That you don't want me to go
I'm the smile in your day
`I don`t like the repitition of "say ." Think of another word maybe ? But I like the last two lines really stick with me .

The ending was absolutely brilliant .
Overall, I liked it .
..__MiNDYY

Amazing. loved this poem.
But it's another restless night
ending in a circle going around
Before I give up
the silence kills the sound
great lines, my favorite part.
keep it up.

This poem is so awesome. you captured your emotion so well. The title fits so well with the work too. great job.
penny

Great job on this piece. Imagery was wonderful.

But it's another restless night
ending in a circle going around
Before I give up
the silence kills the sound

This is so sad. The pain comes from your words.
Take Care Cindy

Nice writing. I really liked it.

Very nice write! keep up the good work!
god bless

This poem was excellent
I can relate
but the last line
that was my favorite part of the poem
it made so little sense that it made all the sense in the world
it leaves you thinking
good job
5/5

This poem is soo touching. This is my favorite part:

You think I have something to say
but I'm waiting to hear you say
That you don't want me to go
I'm the smile in your day

This is a great poem...5/5

Hey man thanks for the comment. I like the way that you rhyme it is done flawlessly. My favorite part is the third stanza it really speaks to me.