WOW that i sreally good:) cool

Thank you. ALOT.

Really good poem, excellently written. You created powerful imagery. 5/5

You make them sound very vengeful and vile.. sort of a different perspective of what people usually think. I like how you called them brothers when usually they are thought of as solitary, and how you started the war with the hopeful-passionate-victorious thing but in the end they still lost..

and yet, the mood never changed. Whether or not you intended this.. it's cool, but it would've been better if there was a mood change in the middle to emphasize more clearly.

You said that you liked to be critiqued lol. I've actually got one (or two) vampiric poems that are just full of mistakes.. (if you wanna check them out..)

Ah, this poem was amazing. my friend read it the same time i did and he really like it also. great job love :x 5/5.

GREAT JOB! Fantastic!