Comments : Gone With the Sin

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is beautifully written...sad and moving, and yet hopeful at the same time.
    Flow is good throughout the poem, and the imagery you portrayed created vivid pictures.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    Bulling me was no cure for your depression.
    ^ I think you meant "Bullying".

    Awh, I really liked this. It sort of had that girl power feel to it haha. Very powerful emotions and descriptions. The vocabulary choice was good and the flow worked very well. Overall, lovely job, I was not bored by it and found it quite original. Niceely done. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Wow. I don't think words can express how much I like this poem. I'm adding it to my favorites. :]

    "Kicking me down every chance you received,
    Your constant lies I always believed.
    That horrid repulsion, etched into your face,
    Always feeling you had to put me in place."

    ^^ I LOVE those lines. Amazing.

    5.5
    :]
    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I think the ending of this poem was really good. Is this from the HIM contest? Anyways, I liked the poem's flow, but the first two lines didn't rhyme like the rest of the poem. Overall, nice poem.