Comments : As I

  • 16 years ago

    by reborn

    Shit sorry bro. i gave u a quick 4/5. but just read it again n if i could take it back i would give u a 5/5... i didn't see the rimes cuz of the way it's layed out... i'd advise u to seperate them this way:
    "As I gaze into your eyes
    i watch these days go by.
    As I sit here holding you
    im glad it's only us, only two.
    As I think of all our past
    we've had no reason not to last.
    As I lay down by your side
    feelings of love I can not hide.
    As I rememeber the day we met
    i wouldn't take back anything i have no regret.
    As I write this poem for you I can not get you off my mind,
    our love is strong it's so divine."

    nice rimes! nice thoughts. really liked i feel bad i underated u. hope this comment makes it up! check out my poems i think we have a similar style of writting. i'll return the favor

  • 16 years ago

    by TyrantxTia

    Wow this is actualy realy good. i mean as i read it i felt you were saying it to me. i can feel the love you must have for this girl.. she's realy lucky