Ooooh, another awesome write gabs!! Im in like a writers block at the moment lol but your poems now make me want to just grab a pen and paper haha they inspire me Gabs!!! Be proud lol this really was a good poem!!

Wow..I really loved the mystery in this gaby..you two really did a good job
I liked especially those lines;

The warmth of the sun
abducted before dawn,
the creatures of the day
from the land, they've withdrawn.

Keep it up hunny
Your friend,
Laura

I really liked this...very different, and made for a refreshing read.
The imagery was beautifully done, flow was good throughout and word choice and the rhyme scheme are enjoyable.
Beautiful work to both of you.

Ooo this gave me shivers!!!! good work!
5/5
Geo

"Wolves howl to the moonlight,"

`Wolves howl to the MOON, not to the moonlight (= It's merely a light coming FROM the moon). But then again, it would rupture the rhyme pattern. I'd suggest this line, though: "Wolves howl under the moonlight."

`The thought of "Branches falling from trees," is quite vague. Perhaps it meant to say 'leaves' instead of 'branches'?

"Cold wind blows, burning,"

`I find that line rather redundant.

Other than that, this dark piece certainly scored good points from me, most notably is its brilliant imagery.

"Skeleton trees rustling,
stripped bare from the moon,
ice shards in the branches,
diamonds falling soon."

I adore that stanza on the whole--simply vivid and splendid. I actually could visualize it with a stark image in mind. Additional props for that.

Overall, it's a fine work. Some lines could be augmented to help the consistency of the poem as well as the poem itself. I, nevertheless, enjoyed reading it. 5/5

I like rhyming. This poem is excellently written. Topic is great and atmosphere of this piece is amazing. Imagery is superb. 5/5