GREAT poem short , but I like it , kinda know what you mean, sometimes it's hard to get rid of a memory, mine anyway, great job, your friend Tracy dean5/5

I would like to see more on this.

Alright I must tell you get rid of "My friend".

Though it leaves information so that the reader can interpret it is dedicated to your friend. Your reader might love your work so much they might dedicate it to someone else.

But how is this possible if you put My Friend.

You want the reader to be connected to the poem.

But,

I like this poem, really, "Will this pain missing you ever end?"

I added the "?". Made it more dramatic. I LOVE that ending. I comment and critique and ask you to consider changing it.

Your poem.

5/5