Personally i like it, speacially when you are talking about how you made him what he is and he has discouraged you to what you have become, nice job, 5/5

The mesage was clear, and the word choice was sim[;e yet effective, the emtion was strong and clear, and the flow was good. Keep up the good work only thing that could be improved on is in the fist staza second line there should be their

Once again don't worry about not having friends and people who aren't like you, your unique and different and thats what matters. You'll find more friends in the long run that are much better to have around. Great job 5/5

This is great! this is my favourite so far! again the problems and thought patterns u address in your writing are so common in every day life with school and friendship and worries about fitting in and stuff!
I like your writing, really i do, my only suggestion is that widening your vocab may be efffective in addressing the problems u like to address. It would provide a sort of...contrast between the simplicity of your topics but the complexity of how you describe it, which could be cool =]
Geo

The flow was a little off. I liked the format you used. I gave it a 5/5.

It describes u so much gj

Hey kyle its harley
ill reather not the "cool" to many problems with friends and such
and u have friends and that makes u cool
be yourself cuz ppl dont like fakes