I like your style of writing its very honest, and address real life problems which occur in almost every day life, which is a rare thing to find in poetry. Being able to take an everyday occurance and make it sound beautiful is a gift. I like this poem and how real and honest it is.
Geo

"i this there a bunch of low liefs" there couple of mistakes in this line. You gotta check it out. Nevertheless this piece is worth 5/5. Your selection of words are nice.

There are some mistakes in this poem, but once you know what it is supposed to be it sounds great. 5/5

Kalee