Excellent Jack,

Again very well written. I like the use if imagery in this poem the extended metaphor in particular is quite powerful.

This is a very sad poem Jack, it's nice to see that you have a good outlet for your emotions.

Keep it up.

Mr. P

Wicked Jack glad to see you are writing again!!

Keep it up

Love ya mate x x

Absoultely luved it...
the emotion put into it was great and the emotion that you can feel wen u read it is wonderful!

i wna hear more from u!

.:katelyn:.

I think this is the sweetist poem yet!!! you constantly impress me! very amazing