I don't like your format.
It just seemed very forced.
Honestly?
To me, this seemed like a rap song.

I thought it was very creative.
Lol.

Your rhyming, though.
It's very basic.
Kick it up a notch.
Try other words that no one else uses.
Be original.

All in all, dear.
Great job.
5/5

I liked it. At first I thought that the flow would be off because some of the lines were a little longer than the rest but it turned out alright. I liked the word choice. I gave it a 5/5.

It has been awhile since you post a poem, but i think it was a perfect one, you have done a wonderful like always.
so glad to read it. keep it up

Interesting. It seemed abit rough at the start but then the emotion beacame stronger and dragged you in more. Nice poem well written very heartfelt and i enjoyed it alot :) well done 5/5

Good poem. especially liked:
"The tears stroll down my face,
Faster and faster; at a higher pace."

"And inside I still feel hope,
Enough to help me cope."

Well structured with good flow and emotion.
a truly amazing piece
love always, Tara-Kay
xxxxxxx