Hey,
A nice poem, I haven't written a Kyrielle yet but it seems intresting..I think you did a wonderful job on making this poem, the flow is good as wel as the rhyming, you deserve a 5/5 from me, and I'm glad the site helped^_^
kisses stephanie

Its ME again.

Okay. So first. The Critique.
1) You need to work with... better flow. I don't know how... to EXPLAIN what I mean... but... it needs a better... hmm... please forgive me, but I can not explain better. All I can tell you is it needs better 'flow'.*

2) You must find... other words to rhyme with. The rhyme is okay. But the words you used are... well. Do not fit. For example:

"His claws blemish then they ''betray'';
He pounces with deep disarray."

Quote the word Betray. How did the claws of this... creature betray? Does the creature know this... other character? So then this Creature ''betray's'' him/her?

(Get what I mean?)

For the praise!!!!
Lol. Good Poem. I like the Theme, er. Plot. Idk whats the correct term. Theme? Plot?. The backround meaning of the poem. Get it?

I like the POEM okay? Besides. "Kyrielle's" does not look easy... They proven to be very difficult. The fact you managed the PLOT to make sense is impressive.

I am impressed. Truly I am.

I cannot vote Excellent because I seen MASTER poems in this... form of writing.

But its not Fair. Its beyong better than fair. Its better than Good too. But I can't put excellent...

I comprised with Good.
But in my opinion. It's Excellent.

PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I shall forever always be,
[Deathly'Amore]

Wow. this one was so into depth and it was very intriguing as well as capturative. i don't see anything that you should change, it was great :)