Comments : When He Gets Close to Me

  • 16 years ago

    by ABake

    Wow. This was very nice and I loved this stanza.

    I want fireworks to burn in my soul
    But when they do, they only leave holes.
    I'm doomed to feel nothing in my heart.
    'Cause when he gets close to me, I fall apart.

    The fireworks part gave beautiful imagry even if it is in a weird way!
    Great Job!
    5/5
    _-Amber-_

  • 16 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Comment #9:

    Honestly girl your poems are just amazing! The last two stanzas are just breath-taking! You have so much talent...I mean, wow. I can't believe how often I can feel what your saying. AMAZING!
    ~Midnight Sun