The first stanza really grabbed my attention because I know what it's like to actually have that on your mind all the time. The poem was great and the flow was as well, it's like a scary story almost. Excellent job and great imagery 5/5 P.S. stanza 2 line 3 your missing an r - take care GG23

Hey Venessa =]
Nice poem.
I liked how you put all three terrifying words into the last line of the last stanza, it rounded off the poem perfectly and was a good way to end it.
The descriptions are good and the whole poem is believable which is good. =]
Take care,
Geo

Wow. Extremely amazing poem. The word choice was good, along with the flow. The capitalized words, well I don't think they need to be capitalized all the way through, but oh well, eh. :] The poem reminded me of that show snapped on the oxygen channel. lol.
Amazing poem, I wish you luck on winning hun.

I got speechless with this haunting masterpiece..You really reflected this woman's anxiousness too real and significant..It was totally perfect
Keep it up,
Laura

Ah excellent. i loved how you highlighted the words, made them stand out. then last line use em all in one final burst!

5/5 David

Oh.
Dear.

I could kill myself with your BLOOD and KNIFE. >.<

First off.
If you're going to write about killing someone, describe it.
Make me <feel> your anger at the person. Make me <imagine> that knife.
Secondly.
Don't do it cliche like.
Use a fricking straw to his eye for all I care. But. No. More. Cliche.
I'm seriously going to start making banners that say "Kill The Cliche!". >.<
Anyways.

Do NOT capatalize things in your poem to make them stand out. Put them in brackets [] to get the point across so that it sticks out when the reader reads it, and it doesn't stick out throughout the poem.

Ok.
I'm done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

Thats really nice deep emotions are shown...5/5
good Job!!

God bless u

I remember reading this in the forum when you posted it for a contest, and I liked it a lot. I do like it, it's good... a bit like a horror movie, really. It is rather cliche, but I like cliche, so it's alright. :P

Good job.

Wow thats amazing. Shows feeling, I hope it's not true!that would suck to live life knowing you killed someone who was innocent! 5/5

Wonderful piece. Again, creating detailed imagery, and the title worked in so well with the poem. The vocab was great, describing everything so well. Everything about all of your poems is just so perfect. It's hard to comment them all without saying the same thing. I can never find anything wrong with them. You're going on my favorites. =] 5/5 for this.

Tammie

Good piece here...i liked it...hey...thanks for the comments and i hope u vote next time around...i give u 5/5 for this latest...*smiles at u*

It is a great poem and i like the way you wrote it keep it up
carly

It is a great poem and i like the way you wrote it keep it up
carly

Really good has a great flow really captivating! i enjoyed every bit of it, which makes it hard to comment other then saying great job looking forward to your other poems!

Really good has a great flow really captivating! i enjoyed every bit of it, which makes it hard to comment other then saying great job looking forward to your other poems!