This was a tragic story about the scorned love many of us have lived through. It was a bit long but made up for the length in depth. It kept me wondering how it would end. Suicide? Divorce? Wow just a cliffhanger. There were a couple of grammar mistakes but nothing that would change the story. The flow with mood and good were aesthetically pleasing but seemed a little forced to find something to fit. As far as the story and the poem overall you have pulled off a very difficult task of staying on subject. I often have trouble with mine doing that when I write longer pieces. Good Job.
Kay