I like it. this is your first sonnet?? wow. hey check mine out. tell me what you think cuz i think you're a pretty good writer and i would love the critizm if you have the time. the sonnet i submitted is my first one too so yeah. hmb some time. ttyl honey.

I really liked this one. It was different, and it had a great point. I loved the words you chose to use here, it all fit perfectly. Great job