Oh my, wow. this one was so into depth and it was very intriguing as well as capturative.
i felt the pain, and the feeling was not lovely at all.
i'm sorry for all of the people that get let down like that.
but i just hope that each and every one of those people can smile and move on.
even though that's a tough thing to do.
5/5 love.

Ok very good. apart for 2 things. 1 the ending sentence which should be more powerful i u can. n here there is no rime:
"I don't have the strength to stand, no stength to sleep
I stay awake all night as the monsters talk to me"
loved the loneliness described here! u sure are one of my favs!