Man that was strong so much power and strength into that it gave me goose bumps readin it shoot man keep it up~!!! hand

I really like the way you write, it's very poetic and you write with lots of emotions, just your style lovely. Keep up the good work.

Finally you finished your poem.
I must say I loved it!
we are simply Only Human but that does not mean that is an excuse that we may do anything we like and then just say i'm just a simple human we must take responsibility for our mistakes and relise when we have done wrong. And we don't all make these big mistakes like cheat on our partners, accidently kill someone out of anger, hit someone or lie. It depends on what type of person you are being human is not an excuse it's a reality. loved it and I love you.
5/5
-AC

Your words speak so true to me, well done. your passion and understanding through out this poem was remarkable.

the last part though, where you went on to explain yourself was so insighting, this part i loved reading the most, so uplifting and beautiful.

5/5 David

Makaveli great job , you are good at this.

Hey thanx for the coment. I just read this, I hope u dont mind but I put it on my Myspace Blog, I gave u full credit for it tho. I was extremly impressed, ur only 13 and yet u have so much insight, my cousin was right about u haswell. it truly amazing that a 13 year old could be has wise has u r. Excellent work my friend, I hope that the years to yet pass do not change ur insightful veiws, and only expans ur horizian.

Wow amazing yore theerteen and already you wright like this cant wait to see what you can do when your older

I agree. You wrote this poem greatly. Message is superb. I like ending the most. Excellent work it really deserves 5/5

MAKAVELI this was so reality, its like it.

I guess for once i met someone i share a greater part of my personality with...i love what u think and write...nice to mee u

My favorite section:
"We are subservient to re-living out our history
Declaring a problem, but not taking responsibility
Watching through the reflection of our champagne glasses
The massive genocide forced down onto our own kind
While revenge seeps through the cracks of tragedy"

This was a fantastic poem. I loved the imagery, especially in the above...
I truly wish I could write as you do. And this is not out of any desire for you to read my work[though, obviously, I would appreciate it], but I sincerely believe you would enjoy "Spin It" and "I Am Not."

Spin It is my evaluation of the chaos in our society, the stereotypical doings of not so stereotypical people.
I Am Not is my anti-ode to America, which is really, well, self explanatory.

I hope I don't sound self-promoting, honestly I think you would appreciate them.

Your poem is fantastic. I loved it.
5/5.
--SP

Wow, every single word of this poem I agree with. It's really remarkable... I mean, we are humans and people always feel that we shouldn't make mistakes, but it's all part of living. Maybe someday we will realize just what is right and what is wrong... Keep up that great work :)

~Ashley

Everything i want to say is alredy said...just like my life...11/10

Beautiful work sister!! Thanx for your comment on my poem!!

This was sick