Comments : A goodbye

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Excellent word choice, powerfully put. The emotion was deep, and the flow was amazing the only problem I could find with this is
    Because he will not hurt me like you did to me..
    The second me in this line messes up the flow a bit, and it doesn't make much sense in my opion it would sound, and flow better if you left it out. other than that excellent job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Rin

    Very bold Jazzi, loved it. Just like you... spunky, Way to go