Again a lovely written poem of a broken hearted girl. i like it well done xxxxxxxx

The rhyme is great and it gives it rythym. the poem is great.

Amazingly amazing.
my fave stanza :
my eyes are swollen
my face is wet
it's all your fault
that i'm so upset
sinnnnnnnnnnnging it to myself right now.
haha. =]
5/5 <333333333 JENNAY

I would try and work on it maybe not being so... just try not to make the words you rhyme so simple. I really like it, but you need to expand what you're thinking. Try and elaborate with visuals and not so much with words. The words are the vessel to which you use to express what you're feeling. But they need to be descriptive. I liked it though... 4/5. Good job.

Hmm... it has a very excellent ending.. and i think theres something behind of this poet.. and i can feel!! ilove the heartahce, i love the way how u describe ur pain. sometimes thru writing.... it help us to prevent or relieves and specially express our deeply feelings.. so just keep on writing... great one1 5/5

Very good write it was full of passion and strength

laura

I gave you a 5 because I think its a really good poem and it has a great flow to it. good job
xXxBritxXx

Ouch, sounds so hurt. ><
Here are my fave lines.
"the smile you seen
i'm afraid to say
it wasn't even real
just a fake to cover up my pain"
The flow's very good.
It's easy to read too..
Nice poem.. 5/5 ^^

I lthink this is good i really like it, keep on writing

I liked this. the flow was almost perfect, and the word choice was good. good job!

I love this poem.. it flows great.. the words just all fit perfect... definitely felt all the emotion in this one! great job. 5/5

That was soooooo good! every time i comment on people's poems, i am shocked at all of the talent that is on this site. 5/5!!!

It was so simply written, but I was still able to see the emotion in the poem. I would not have minded if it was a little longer but I have written a few short poems myself.

Overall, I thought the poem was good. It was laiden with emotion and it was almost as if I could feel your pain. It was good.