Comments : Humans

  • 16 years ago

    by Richard Machado

    I loved the questions and how they prod. The only critique is the end. It has alot to say, but it delivers it poorly. Try to play around with the words a bit, and I think, it would be a better ending if it was a question. That way we are asking ourselves what you are trying to say, and the poem sticks more. Very good poem needs some work though.