Hey thanx for the comment and i thought i would read one of urs this one i can relate to lol i like it i give it a 5/5 keep up the good work!! and thanx again

-Angel/Tara

I really liked your poem I can relate to it, alot and its not very often that I can read a poem and relate to it. your a good writer keep it up! :)

Ok its not your poems somethign with me today jsut cant get into poetry so yeah it was a good poem but i am jsut not feeling it today hmm i must be tired anyways 5/5 on this one

I know that feeling too well, awesome poem.

Great poem! i like how the feelings are really like.. expressed. and how you know that the character is very unhappy. great details.

Liking this. It's not overly emo but it puts across how you're feeling and the will power you have to just keep going.

cc

My favourite stanza,
"I put on a brave smile,
Underneath this thin layer i am distressed and unhappy,
Please someone come and save me,
This girl is calling out for help"
I think many people can relate to this.
keep up the great work.

"I put on a brave smile,
The world is none the wiser,
My soul plummets into a deep abyss,
I look up and just smile at passers by,"

^ Wow. This poem was really good. I have felt like this so many times, probably like many others as well.
It was a very emotional write && the flow was good too. Wonderful job. 5.5

- Steph <3

I love this poem mainly bcuz thatz wat i do i smile and everyone thinks that im happy but deep inside i know im not this poem is very touchin

This was a realllly good one. i thought it might be cliche but i actually really liked it :]
good job.

Hey babe ur so talented hehe....we should catch up

O_O we can relate
:'[ beautiful work
i liked it

I related with brave smile, it is something alot of people can relate to. 5/5

your friend,
Mary

Your poems seem to go up and down with your style, but lack of rhyme suited this more. i enjoyed the 'today i...' stanza. rating; 5

This is especially a good poem because their is a ton of people that could relate.. and like the other one it's something that alot of people can understand. it twas a beutiful poem lol

Many people never realize that the one that smiles the most usually is the one that undergoes the most pain, like myself. Only the people that truly know me, knows im hurt. A friend once told me he respects me because behind my beautiful smile is all the hurt, and that is wat this poem was about, BRAVE SMILE.. I trully like this piece, here's a tip tho

I felt that if you wrote

Today i felt lonely,

I felt torn apart,
confused,

Today i felt depressed,

rather than:
Today i felt lonley,
Today i felt torn apart,
Today i felt confused,
Today i felt depressed,

This poem would be stronger. But it was still great, Dont stop writing

Katy,

This is very well written ~ I enjoy reading your poems because they are written with such feeling, and about very real things we face in our lives.

Nice job!

Connie