''He grins at me from in my dreams
His choice lullaby are my screams''

Ohhh my...those lines..frikken excellent.

You did a great job with this piece, the imagery you painted creates vivid pictures, the flow is perfect throughout, word choice is a pleasure to read.

The opening gripped me, and from there it just continued to get better. I found the whole piece to be very powerful and intense, with a beautiful, stunning ending.

Killing me at my core is the beast within

The beast within is what controls me
[[I really don't like that you used "the best" twice in a row..]]

But, I really didn't like this poem. Something about it really struck me; I know you can write so much better.
Sorry, Synh.

However.
Why won't he let me die? - This secret's killing me
[[I loved this line. It's the only good part about the poem. =/.]]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 3.5

Poem was good 4/5