I love how in the begining you had a birthday party like our's now but then it all turned into her imagination.It was beautiful and well written. I enjoyed it and thought it was a wonderful read.
Truly you have a talent.
Keep it up.

Wow this is splendid, very catching. Its really one of your best I feel. Great write with strong rhymes and a flawless flow. Keep it up

This was really good, the title was captivating, every line held imagery that was so unique, wording was simple yet strong. you have a pure talent, my friend
keep writing
love Tara-Kay
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Wow. Saddd, but good poem.
I didn't like how it said 'mum' instead of mom, though, bugged me.
it made me want to cry, though.
it was sad. ;/
gahh.

good job. keepit up hun.
your'e a good writer.

Woah. This poem made me cry and smile at the same time. It's so emotional, this girl has nothing yet she's so greatful. She's a great example for the world today. I loved everything about this poem, from the emotions protrayed to the wording and detial.

Overall, 5/5

I think I'll add you to my favorites, too.
=)

Improving the lives of everyone who had nothing at all
Even if it was just doing something small
She would grow up and make her parents glad
That they had a little girl that just wasn't too bad

my fave lines ^^

thought the poem was awesome. the way you use your words again, such a great piece. 5/5

This is one of the best poems I've read in a long while.. It's definately going in my faves 5/5 of course!

Wow this one so very beautiful and sad.
So tragic that she knows her parents are going to die, but what i liked the most in this one is that you described you should never stop giving up the dreams that you have and believe in.
Great write I enjoyed it very much :)

5/5

xo angelique