I like it

I really enjoyed reading this poem. Many thoughts ran through my mind and I think that by reading this wonderful piece of writing, I have learned the meaning. Truths concealed by lies. It's powerful. I liked how consistant your rhythms were. I also enjoyed how it rhymed in just the right places. Great job!

Miss Ashley,

I always adore how you conveyed much thoughts and truth in your words. The theme you used, which was "truth concealed by lies," along with the figurative use of light and darkness as well as the attributes of a bird, was rather enchanting.

"But when a truth [breaks] free,
From the web of lies, you can finally see,
That light and dark must work together,
In order to have, a word called "forever"."

I really, really liked that passage of the poem. Indeed, such positive and negative items need to be proportional with each other, in order to achieve serenity and balance.

You write in such an elegant manner whereby I was awfully captivated by the beauty in which you write. A lovely, provocative piece, nonetheless. Thanks for sharing! 5/5 ~Marian

I enjoyed this. i found it to be original and unique in concept and the whole piece was written with so much beauty and elegance. i particularly enjoyed how you compared light to dark. it added for a powerful effect. flow was flawless throughout the entire piece and every aspect of this piece came together to create a very enjoyable read.