A beautifully expressed poem 5/5 i liked the repetition of "as the couple lay on the sand". keep writing!

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~NinjaGirl~

Truly great description in fact superior i was able to paint a picture in my head but needs more transition and sounded like talking kind of 4/5 however i liked it maybe u can read one of mine.

A shorT buT beautifuL piecE 5/5 brilliantlY penneD. keeP writinG!