Yeah, it was okay, but it didnt really have that flow to it that makes a poem brilliant, but it was good anyway
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Interesting poem, I like the beginning a lot, but I didn't expected that it will end with death.
It's written more like a story, but that isn't bad at all in this piece.
You have good choice of words in it.

This is unusual poem... First four stanzas are great. They are unique and amazingly written. But last three stanzas are poor. I don't now, beginning deserves 5/5 but the ending totally throw me off. I won't rate it.