Comments : Just Because

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I think you shouldnt hange it, its how you felt and at the time this is how it came out - et it be :)

    good job xxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    It doesnt suck, but there could have been some chnages to make the timing better, but still i liked it and the concept alot, 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    Gr8 poem!!!!!! really well writen!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I really enjoyed reading this poem, I think most people have these feelings sometimes it's just normal I guess. It's a very sad thing to feel alone in this world, amazing poem 5/5 GG23

  • 12 years ago

    by Miranda

    I wouldn't change a thing.This poem is very unique in itself.I think by changing it,it would take away it's uniqueness.
    The flow was a little off in some parts but the poem is still good. 5/5
    Miranda

  • 12 years ago

    by nikki

    As much as you thought it sucked, it doesn't it was well written, you can see the emotions in it, it was sad, yet it was nicely done, i loved the way it is now, great work. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    One of the common poems i read and it was such a cliche. but still i like it coz the emotions were there and these lines just reveal it:

    "No one really cares for me.
    Yes my family and friends do
    But the ones whom I want
    Don't even look twice at me

    I just try my hardest
    For someone to look at me
    And make this pain disappear
    But I am just invisible

    Like my whole life, I have always been clear.
    I don't like it anymore I want out of this nightmare
    Can't tell you how much I care because I don't anymore
    You tell me I am pretty, you tell me I am yours
    But you lie to me and kill me, Break my heart into two.

    So I end this poem on that note telling you I don't really care
    Because you were there and now your not
    That is the story of my life
    Just trying to make it all work"

    nothing more to say just o keep it up

  • 12 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Mind-blowing...

  • 12 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Good job

  • 12 years ago

    by A F

    "You tell me I am pretty, you tell me I am yours
    But you lie to me and kill me, Break my heart into two."

    I can relate to this.
    But I don't really get the message of this poem.
    I think this poem would come out good when you revise it (:

    <3