Aww wow this piece is such a good depiction of a break up. it flows so well and its really really easy to read. its just an awesome piece!!
' Cause I'm giving up on you
I'm giving up on me
I'm giving up on everything
That I hold dear to me' these lines sum up the emotion of the piece really well
great stuff, 5/5
ali

^ thats not from me!!!
this piece is a really good depiction of a break up and it flows really well, making it easy to read. i like the way you refer to the other character in the closing lines as baby, it gives another level of sadness to the piece. its another really good piece
5/5!!!
- ali x