These verses woul completly make awesome lyrics. i really like it, it was so full of emotion that i could feel it. anyway good luck with future poems and make sure that they all have some type of message. like this
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I liked this poem out of all of them. It is really descriptive and has alot of emotions. Really good! ~Neely~

I liked this poem out of all of them. It is really descriptive and has alot of emotions. Really good! ~Neely~

I liked this poem out of all of them. It is really descriptive and has alot of emotions. Really good! ~Neely~

This is a really great piece, the emotion is so real and it was so easy for me to feel and relate to. this is soo meant to be a song by the way!!!
great stuff!!!
5/5
- ali x