"strait" = "straight"...sorry to be petty lol

"All thoughts building up
in her mind of him.
Are beginning to suffocate her."

I love that stanza...its very true that love can take your breath away, whether it be positively or negatively..and captured that with this poem...great work! 5/5

Very original poem. Atmosphere is incredible... This piece is simple but very powerful. Topic is interesting and you describe3d emotions superbly. 5/5

Sorry for that I think described. Again great poem.