Comments : Promise me one thing

  • 16 years ago

    by Krazy

    Again, very good, but try breaking it up into stanzas, it'd be much easier to read, and i think it would flow better.

    You will never know how much you hurt me. You took away my pride.
    Although I picked myself up,
    got it back on my own,
    I can never forgive you for not being there when you should have been.