Very good poem very expressive and alot of emotion.
good job

ashleigh

The feeling in this poem is something amazing... And I can surely relate to it...
it flows very nicely as well...
but maybe you ought to divide it into several stanzas, because you change the rhyme scheme during the poem and with a single stanza the form get's a little bit confusing...

another thing is you wrote "break" without the "e"...
not that much of a problem though... easy to change :)
I also think you could capitalize the first letter of each stanza... it would look better... that's up to you though...

yet the feeling is expressed so wonderfully i can only give 5/5

*keep up*
isabel