I love this...I found it to be very thought provoking and moving at the same time.
Beautiful flow and wording, and such pretty imagery.

I wanna be able to catch a breathe of fresh air,
But when I breathe, there doesn't seem to be any there.
[[I love, love, LOVE this line!!!]]

Life has to slow down, we're all moving too fast.
[[You're missing a word here.]]

As I pick the notes, a melody is made,
But with it, the harmony begins to fade.
With a little help, it seems to fall apart.
Then, of course, it's back to the start.
[[Again, I love this stanza.]]

Now.
Problem.
My favorite parts were within the stanzas, not the chorous. The chorous (correct me if I'm wrong) should be the most catchy part.
However, this was pretty well written and I didn't get bored (like I do with most lyrics), but remember: the chorous needs to be catchy, too.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5