Etched in her mind, along with the pain
she drowns in her tears
everything in a world of non-sense,she smiles
sliping away into her peacfull bliss, she counts the stars!

wow i luved it as much as i luv u!hehe

I thought that this wasnt as good as your others. It didnt sound quite like a poem, and that you just threw together a few lines to make a poem

but the general idea was very good
another, 5/5