Comments : Chocolate By Number

  • 12 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    Wow that was beautiful and very well written ,deep , but extremely good, great job ,keep up the good work, your friend Tracy d 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Cindy

    Debbie
    Beautiful piece.

    Tears spilled in wanton abandon
    Unnoticed
    Drops upon an infinite lake
    As time
    Friend or foe?
    Gleefully counted by number
    Outlining my heart
    Tracing my life

    The countdown is getting lower everyday.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 12 years ago

    by Barry

    Debbie you are awesome

  • 12 years ago

    by Barry

    I love dove chocolate........

  • 12 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    Wow! How touching and beautiful! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Debbie, what a beautiful penned once again you portrait here, such a unique style writing... marvelous!!

    Words may be mild and fair but the tone may pierce like a dart; Words may be soft as the summer air but the tone may break the heart; For works come from the mind, grow by study and art, But tone leaps from the inner self, revealing the state of the heart.

    Have a good day! an talk with you again soon, be safe, Bert.

  • 12 years ago

    by Nicola Barton

    I dont think i am smart enough to undertand this i like plain simple poems, but your language is great and i am drunk

  • 12 years ago

    by Mr M

    I really liked the metaphoric analogy of how the sexual experience is no different than eating chocolate...at least that what I got from this. Did I over think it?

    ...extremely well written. pablo would be proud....

  • 12 years ago

    by Poetess

    I loved this. The title, the whole thing just drew me in. Don't know what to say. I wish I could write a poem like this. A truly amazing write. 5/5. Never stop.

    ` Liz =]

  • 12 years ago

    by Debbie

    Wow, again. This was a huge metaphorical poem written in such a classy manner. Very, very poignant to say the least. <3 Keep them coming, ma'am!

  • 12 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Very clever mother. I do love your writing and I do love chocolate!!!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Fsams

    So metaphorical and creative. Love is dimentional and your poems create really beautiful, mournful, romantic etc etc impressions.

    Love your poems
    Fsams

  • 12 years ago

    by Wake

    Simply Superb .. Loved It .. a woo-hoo :P

    ~Wake~

  • 12 years ago

    by ben thompson

    Huh? i guess i'm simple i just really did not understand but thanks for sharing your beautiful words.

  • 11 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    I actually have tears in my eyes... This is endlessly touching and I can relate to this stunning poem on so many levels.
    Whole metaphor within this piece is fantastic, and I am honestly left in awe.
    Brilliant piece of sad poetry, filled with so many excellently expressed emotions. I like the imagery that you portrayed, too.
    This poem brings me back some memories and that made it so captivating for me.
    Superbly done.