Hmmmmmm...very unique.... alot different from other poems that i've read before...

i like it.

Wasn't very deep or dark or scary or anything, I mean I was expecting chills from the title, I think it could use some work. But I will give you a 4/5 for the imagination to it.

Simple style but great write. I love dthe wordings and the flow. You kept it well structured and I cherished the words :)

Very nice n it own unique style 5/5

Fsams

The reader can feel the intensity of your words.
The depth had so much more meaning,
than what is normally put to poems.
I can relate so much to this one.
Flow was done quite well.
Overall Rating: 5.0/5

I liked it=]
The punctuation was weak though.
But overall it was good.

I can relate to this piece, it's very dark and powerful, greatly written.
My favorite lines are:
-i wanna be real
i wanna feel

Never again do i want to do what you say
Never again not tomorrow not today-
5/5

This is both interesting and creative.
Different in concept, which made for a refreshing read.
I did think that there were to many fillers (I, you etc) which sometimes disrupted the flow.
Apart from that however, I think this is effective and well written.

I've never really seen a writing style like this. Well I have, but you put a different spin on it. Way to go.

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