This one is even more better then ''whats her name''. I like it very much. Topic is interesting and you wrote this one greatly. This piece is very emotional.
-It's stirpping me down
So the web just gets wider
I smile and submit
Though I'm dying to fight her-
^This stanza is incredibly written.
-Each twinge of the past
Brings a pang of this Guilt
That I'd die to forget
and to sift through the silt-
this is my favorite stanza, it is so powerful.
Well done!

Your words are ever so powerful.
The depth kept me reading and reading.
I felt as though.. I knew everything..
how it felt to you.. all the emotions.
Simply amazing, you're a great poet.
Overall Rating: 5.0/5

"And the enemy really
That covers these holes
Is just my reflection
I'm hoping it shows"

^^ My favourite stanza of the poem. So meaningful and brutally raw and honest.

I loved this because of the depth and emotion you put into the piece, it is easily felt by the reader.

Flow is FLAWLESS throughout, and I found this to be beautifully written.

LOVE the ending, so intense that it hits the reader like a slap in the face.