WOW, i loved this so much
the flow and the concept were great

but there is one problem

"You tell the tales of your broken home, the inducing pain left by the monsters who show you no acknowledgment."

If they are inducing pain i think there has to be no aknowledging unless the pain is PRODUCED(not induced) by the lack
of acknologment.

and my faovirite parts are

"In-famousness has been stamped across your forehead as a bar-code permanently attached."

but i dont think it would be in-famousness
it would be infamy(sp?)

but i loved that line and this one

"They might just be watching with popcorn to throw at you.
Each piece containing a horrible truth which they will soon find out."

i just love the imagery

5/5

"As for the rest, they'll be laughing As you grow weaker from the lack of oxygen.
The mess you created; at least you're getting noticed. "

I can feel the distaste in your poetry.
You actually work wonders with that.
Another amazing poem, Ashley.
I envy you. :/
Depth, insight, heart, emotion.. all there.
Overall Rating: 5.0/5

It was great....The flow was a little off to me...But the vocab was excellent

The mess you created; at least you're getting noticed

^ I loved those lines...

4/5

I liked that... a lot ~