"I only live for you, I love you (so) much"
That's my favorite line, although... the last line is kind of an anti-climax.. 'cause you're talking so much of how much you love this person.. it would be nice to keep the person forever and not a while...

But that's just what I think... tis your poem lass, but otherwise its great! =D
The imagery and the language is like.. phwoar.. strong!

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