Comments : Bound

  • 16 years ago

    by sara

    Beautiful poem

  • 16 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "than I am just"
    'then' not 'than' then implies causality, which is what you were saying, aka e.g. i.e. an 'if....then' statement.

    So this poem was very solid.

    The beginning didn't launch any fireworks for me, I'm not going to lie. cages, hearts, souls, wishing, binding, etc, all seems very...'done before'-ish.

    However, the second stanza turns it around a bit. It transitions from 'oh I'm helplessly waiting for you' to 'I'm helpless and I know that's crap, but I am.'

    Which is awesome. "Though this defies my every theory" is a great way to preface the third stanza, and it definitely is what makes this poem great. Everyone has times when they feel hypocritical or weak because they can't stand up to their own mental standards. Solid, I say.