This was a very nice peice. A different topic but it had an interesting twist to it.
Your whole set-up of the poem was ebautiful and I think it added more to the overall peice.
Great job!
5/5
((Amber))

...very enjoyable ride and read on your train of thought....charmingly visual.....

"the will of my frustration
wasn't quite enough to edge
the train into sight."

-terrific