"the Mind has yet to accept this fate

the Mind must accept this simple fact"

Just a suggestion, but you might want to use a thesaurus to find a word for "accept" in the second line. :)

Very great. MAN I missed your work. The rhythm was a little off, but I think it almost adds something to the poem. Let me know if you add more stuff! :)
PV

Hello my wonderful big brother who I love so much :)
Great poem it's very deep. I don't think I have actually read any poems..I dont remember but I enjoyed this one :) I reminded me of how I feel in a sense....I'd made me think a lot about things...see right now Im in a tight situation..I will explain it later :) but I love you sooo much mwah xxxxxxxxxxxx Love you Big bro :) xxx

Wow.. tis amazing write.. Loved it.. it flows completely great together and it pulls you in to want to read it all.. nd yet the poem speaks the truth.. the heart knows yet the mind simply hides.. great piece of work.. keep it up!!.. 5/5

Wow. This poem is amazing. It is so full of emotion and thought. Beautiful. It gave me goose bumps. Very good!
~Kayla