Wow. =] I like this one as well. Really strong poem actually! I like how you go on, between stanza 2 and 3 with the same word: Sink. That was really neat. ^^ Anyway.. a 5/5 again for you =) Cause this was a nice poem too! =]

Sink in the well of wrong and right
drown in the stories shes been told
she'll finally get some sleep tonight
so she can let her life unfold.

Wow loved this stanza. The wordings are powerful with appropriate lexis. Great flow and rhythm. 5/5 all the way

Tc
Fsams

I thought this was really good...for some reason however i dont feel that is finished...i feel the story maybe greater than this...but it is still good.

Brit

Angela,

Good work. Like the above reviewer, I didn't particularly feel satisfied with the overall development of the poem. It seemed to me to be mere portions of an even greater poem. I hoped you'll expand it with more coherent details, though. But then, again...

I liked how you stated this line: "Sink in the well of wrong and right". It was relatively sophisticated in illustrating the gap between thoughts, metaphorically. :) Nicely done, m'dear.

Take care,
Marian

5/5

lol i dont know what to say its really awesome though

Wow, great flow and beautiful rhymes. This seems really thought out. I have no criticism for this one. 5/5

marcella