5/5 keep it up!=]

* $heila *

Very cute poem! :)

Some of the spelling and grammar need work in the first stanza, but other than that it was a lovely piece of work! 5/5.

--Lins.

Yeah, some of the spelling isnt great.
But it flowed well, it was a sweet poem, it held emotion and was simple yet capturing.
love Tara-Kay
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Nice job!! Good poem, and you did a really nice job with rhyming.
A few things, on the third line you put where, when i think you meant were.
Also at, "On day me and you" I think you mean one and not on.
Very good, poem, very sweet.
peace,
soffe

This is a great poem..it flowed nicely and the rhyming was also good.....

there are a few mistakes though..in the first stanza "ment" needs to be changed to meant.

and in the last stanza..."go" needs to be changed to god...

but other than that,the poem is great..nice job. 5/5

Aww this is just too sweet :)
Rhyming was excellent, it flowed very nicely.
I really liked it, keep it up!!

You use nice rhyme. I like the way you put true emotions into the poem. makes it even more real. keep up the good work