Love it!=]

* $heila *

I luv this poem!! ... Great Job!! =]]

JUST AMAZIN, i feel this same EXACT way about my current boyfriend. 5/5 i love it

Comment

Just to show you this is worth while.
`It sounds awkward to me when I read that line out loud with the first stanza.
I feel the second stanza -- you could do more with.

I'm not perfect at anything,
But I pride myself in loving you
`I love those lines. They're just amazing and contain a strong emotion.

You stole the breath from my lungs,
When you first looked at my face.
Now we're here speaking in tongues,
I fear you'll leave without a trace.
`I really adore the use of sweet emotion in the first two lines, and then the contradicting of fears and "speaking tongue."

Won't close the gap in you and me.
`Another awkward line, though I do enjoy that stanza.

I pray that this doesn't end,
Not now, and not ever.
You're my lover, my best friend,
And we're better off together.
`I will forever worship that stanza. Such a cliche idea that people use all the time, but you, you make it work beautifully. Along with the way you end it -- again, overused, but with your poem, it's just delightful.

Overall, a real nice piece of work.
--..MiNDYY