Comments : And I Shall Love You, Until I Love No More {Licentia Rhyme}

  • 12 years ago

    by nikki

    Oh my god, like wow. wow, i am speechless. i don't know what to say, it was amazing. i loved the way you structured your words, they melted together perfectly, the words you used just blew me away and the flow was perfect. i have never read a poem on romeo and juliet and the way they would have been thinking. the concept of this poem was unbelieveable. my most favorite lines were these ones

    A soothing breeze glows deathly; "Admit defeat;"
    Dash to him; "Without you, I am incomplete."
    Souls mend their hearts; they've not forgotten the dark,
    Rendered black, hearts sing pity upon the mark.

    once again, a fantastic piece. a def 5/5 from me and great work

  • 12 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Jeez Sheena, can you stop making me speechless already? You're gonna kill me one of these days ;) I love how you have the ability to write on such topics. You use words and rhymes that aren't cliche, like so many writers ((including myself)) use over and over. Your way to express yourself is amazing and truly a give. I love the line: And I shall love you, until I love no more. Just beautiful. Love them all!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Teria

    This is your best poem ever. Well, from what I"ve read. Lol.
    I love it, it's captivating, exciting, enjoyable, and amazing. I absolutely love it, dear.
    The words flow together so amazingly, the flow is just outstanding.
    The word choice; Whoa! Amazing.
    Everything is perfect.
    I love it, :]
    Keep it up dear.

  • 12 years ago

    by DepthofPassion

    This is phenominal...probably my fav. You are a regulaer Shakespeare. I honestly am speechless. wow!!! 10/5


  • 12 years ago

    by Debbie

    Good Heavens, Sheena, how sweet Disgrace is!

    But what I had read in those few moments made me catch my breath in amazement. The bittersweet sorrow elicited by the characters was spine-tingling. The tone of voice was severely emotive and emotions raw and well articulated. It's quite astonishing to note how well you used the forces of nature as a metaphor of Death. (If I got the wrong idea, you better keep quiet...Shh!)

    Gosh, it's too stupendous for words. You had hoped that I'll like it--are you kidding?! I love it. It's an honor to read this masterpiece of yours. Keep it up! All the best and take care.

    +Favorites x]

    5/5 ~Marian.

  • 12 years ago

    by Twisted Heart


    I first read this in a contest and was taken aback by the gravity of emotions being pulled through each line. It was the title, first, that captured my attention, then it was the words, and last the structure. It was, indeed, a very beautiful write.

    It was a tender write, despite the sadness of the message. A wonderful job you did on this.


  • 12 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    An incredible write...i usually try to mark an area of improvement but its hard to do that when its perfect...i love the incorporation of the quotes and dialogue, it creates a very real and vivid image of the story at hand--keep up the good work!

  • 12 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    I may not be speaking with you, But I will comment your poetry.
    This was my favorite of yours.
    you stopped worying about form and just let it flow. it was excellent. and I am indeed, impressed.


  • 12 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    You're really succesful at that poetry forms..I can see you like changes and you know how to do a change in a good way
    Beatifully penned,