Wow amazing poem and you can really tell it was painful to write just by reading it it had so much emotions in it don't know what to say about it really ..it was great keep up the good work x

The rhyme scheme threw me off a little bit. But overall, the concept was nicely done and the vocabulary was relaxed, yet not vague. The form as well was sketchy, try next time to maybe fill it in a little more? It left me with only a little taste, I didn't see or feel the amount I'd wished.
Over all though, aside from that criticism, the poem was nicely done.
Keep the writing up. You have extreme potential, dollface.

-Isaac
(Ian)

Hey amber..it was a real sad masterpiece..I loved the apart lines from stanzas..It made the poem effective

My fave lines are;

So I wish.....

I wish we were together, and that you were still mine.
So many wishes I know will never come true.
Last time they did, but not this time..

Good job,
Take care
Laura

Excellent poem Amber
You've put a lot of emotion into this and it really shows.
The imagery and forlorness really spoke to the reader (in this case, me! lol)
Well done
5/5
*Gem*

It was a very different structure, and I'm glad to see poets reaching out for something outside their comfort zone. You did a nice job expressing your painful emotions. I like how you said you would have an 'unpeaceful sleep.' You worded that well!
Charisma*