This is really truely amazing, thanks so much for sharing! :)

Kay
Graet job on this piece. Imagery was great. Very sad and heartfelt.
Take Care Cindy

"Biting tongue in two
With bitter words unspoken
Hatred boiling deep
Your ties that bind lay broken"

^ What an intense opening. This piece actually reminded me of the Great Controversy, or the battle within the mind. The seeming madness drawn out by a mental illness and/or the character himself was spine-chilling. I further liked the thought of a tale behind this tale. When you said, "Your ties that bind lay broken", it made me think that the character probably has family relationship problems and such-to's...
I truly enjoyed this piece, though. Thanks for sharing. :)

Excellent job. So much imagery && very deep.

Keep it up && Take care!

-Shannon <3

Excellent poem , well written and sad and very deep, lot of emotional feeling felt in it, wonderful choice of words, great job, your friend Tracy d,,,,,,5/5

Kay,

Such bitterness and sadness lies beneath these words...
Excellent write, though.

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid