Jack,
This was a truly emotional piece of poetry! Your imagery was incredible, and i could understand everything you described. I'm glad you didn't get too gruesome!
I don't really know what else to say, so I'll end it here ^_^
Keep it up, 5/5

With all due respect,
Hatori

P.S. If you get a chance, could you please rate and comment one of my poems?
Thanks!

Good poem,, all i gotta say..if ur thinkin about commiting suicide,,,mann dont do that, i lost a friend recently to suicide she may not of thought her family or friends loved her cuz she was living a shitty lifestyle, but we did, and when she past on, it was the hardest thing for me and her family to deal with, so yea, think about that, but if ur not, than nvm and keep up the good work..5/5